Posted by: victanguera | September 25, 2011

Psychic Wars #3 (Six Sentence Sunday)

After reading other’s writing, I’m starting to think my little excerpts aren’t snappy enough. Ah well, for what it’s worth, here are the next six sentences from my WIP:

And you leaned.” Papers littered the floor around the basket. Between the two men, they’d only managed to score with a handful of scrunched up paper balls. “What did that one say? Same as the last?”

“Hard to tell.

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  1. I think this one is snappy enough, 🙂 Good job

    • Ah thanks. I’ve come to the conclusion that my writing is deadly dull and boring, so I appreciate your comment. Any comments for how to improve so it’s no longer boring would be appreciated as well :}

  2. Got a little snap here.

  3. Linda, you’re too hard on yourself! I think your six has great description. Keep up the good work.

    • I’m always very hard on myself. I also don’t know how to judge my own writing (to close to it and all that). When I’ve posted it in writer’s forums for feedback, I’ve gotten very few reads or comments, which leads me to think my writing is boring.

  4. Hmmm… maybe if you had slipped in a bit of characterization about one of the guys at least… since all we know about them is that they’re male. Can you give us a taste more of who they are through their dialogue?

    …and if your writing was boring, I wouldn’t pester you constantly to feed me 😉

    • Ah yes, characterization. Or well saying anything more than the minimum. That’s always been the problem. I try to add that in re-writes, but I’m not always successful. Thanks for the encouragement. I’m trying to figure out whether to sign up for another week of six sentences or not.

  5. YES! You better sign up or I will scold and harass you constantly!

    …and you know how annoying I can be 😉

    Plus, this is fresh writing, right? Most of what people post has been finished/edited and often 6 sentences are taken selectively from somewhere in their story rather than continuing on from the previous 6.

    …hell, you know my beginning didn’t read like that before…

    • Okay fine. You twisted my rubber arm.

  6. 😀

    excellent…

    isn’t it good that I don’t use my powers-of-annoyance for evil?

    …though I admit, I’m awfully tempted sometimes 😉


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